January 02, 2010

My NoKiss Blogfest Scene

So today is the day of The No-Kiss Blogfest, hosted by Frankie. My best no-kiss scene from my WIP is the scene I posted for the Kissing Day Blogfest, but this one gives a hint of a wannabe kiss.

To set it up...Medieval England...Malcolm and Jocelyn were forced into marriage and he is trying to woo her and yet give her room to learn to love him on her own terms. They have just come back from a ride where Malcolm inspected the fields (where he almost kisses her in the stable...my scene from Kissing Day) She asks him to come to the dinner feast and he does. They are seated at the head table in the Great Hall of the castle and his men and other guests are eating at tables around them.

“You complained not once while waiting for me to finish with the field workers.” He shook his head in wonder.

Jocelyn frowned. “You think me impatient?”

Malcolm shrugged. “It seems you have a short memory, my dear lady.” He smiled, as she drew herself up straighter on the bench. She was so predictable. “You forget how you groaned at the slowness of your sword lessons; you whined at each and every delay on our journey to Ramslea; and you heaped your frustration upon me when things did not happen in a timely manner—at least timely in your eyes.”

Malcolm put a finger to the full lips ready to refute his words, and he let his finger trail the edges of her lips. He leaned in close and watched with satisfaction as her eyes grew wide, and her chest rose with the breath she held fast.

“But you surprised me today,” he said in a soft voice. “You said not one impatient word, and you brought me water to quench my thirst.”

His finger moved from her lips and gave in to the temptation to caress her smooth, rosy cheek. “And I have been thirsty of late.”

How he wanted to drink from those lips once again. He watched, captivated, as her lips parted and her teeth caught the crimson swell of her lower lip.

A roar of laughter shook his thoughts free, and he pulled back and blindly grabbed for his drink. He glanced toward his rowdy men and wished he hadn’t. They stared at him with daft grins on their faces, and Ian had the gall to waggle his brows at him.

If he weren’t here at Jocelyn’s request, he’d haul Ian out to the lists and give him a lesson in respect and deference for his lord.

But he was at this feast for her. For his lady.


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And now for one of my favorite clips of an almost kiss! Lois and Clark in Smallville have really been heaping on the tension this year! *heaving huge sigh* Enjoy!




So there you go, my contribution to the No Kiss Blogfest! Head over to Frankie's blog and enjoy all the fun no/almost kissing scenes!


44 comments:

  1. Sherrinda, honestly, I think you are a very talented writer. I LOVE reading the chemistry you create on the page. Seriously...your edits can't be THAT bad, can they?

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  2. Nice work, Sherrinda. Your descriptions are so...luscious. Thanks for sharing!

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  3. Poor Malcolm! You are drawing delicious tension between them. I love his line "I've been thirsty of late." But those darn sidekicks! Nicely done, Sherrinda.

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  4. Haha I love how tongue and cheek he was until....awesome job! Thanks for inspiring the idea and for participating! I can't wait to read your full book!

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  5. I so want to read your book. I just love the story idea and the tone. This is great Sherrinda.

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  6. Oooohh! This was a good one! "...and I have been thirsty..."

    Great line!

    Well done!

    Shelley

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  7. *Sighs* I want more--that was awesome! (I absolutely LOVE it when guys touch girls lips, it always makes me squee!) So glad Frankie gave you a reason to give us just a little bit more. :)

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  8. I love the Malcolm and Jocelyn scene. I love the last line, especially--it just gives it all that much more power. I'd love to see more of this book.

    Also: I HATE Lana!!!!! ARRRRGGGGGHHHHH! Every time she shows up I just want to chase her off again! Poor Lois. She's so much awesomer, and Clark keeps being such a doofus!

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  9. Ooooh, loved your scene. Almost kisses are just as good as the real thing, sometimes even better. And thanks for the Smallville clip. Sigh. I think I could stare at Tom Welling all day.

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  10. Im thirsty for more too !
    awesome scene ! (:

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  11. I love the way your characters talk...in both the scenes I've read I think you've used dialogue very accurately. I think that's why I could never write historical fiction or period pieces...I can't resist the urge to write, "OMG!!!" LOL...great scene!

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  12. I sense she is warming up to her gentleman.....yay.

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  13. I love this scene and I adore your writing, Sherrinda. You got the genes in you, girl, talent that will never end.

    I want more, I want more, I want more...

    Can't wait to see this in print!

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  14. Love the tension. And its nice to read some historical fiction. Most of the blogs I read our YA writers so this was a nice change of pace. :)
    My Blog

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  15. This was wonderful. My favorite line:

    He watched, captivated, as her lips parted and her teeth caught the crimson swell of her lower lip.

    Whew. Captivated says it al. Such sexual tension- I love it. I can't wait to read this!!! You are a very talented writer.

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  16. He watched, captivated, as her lips parted and her teeth caught the crimson swell of her lower lip.

    - love that part. I love your smooth, delicate writing. Beautiful!

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  17. Ooh, I could really feel the tension here! I certainly hope he gets that kiss later on:)

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  18. Great scene, serious tension! And I always love the guy's POV.

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  19. “And I have been thirsty of late.”

    AHHHHHHHHH! That was so awesome.

    And seriously, I haven't watched Smallville in years, but Lois and Clark's sexual tension is phenomenal. (Way better than the Lana and Clark tension ever was.)

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  20. Again I just have to say that I ove this time period the way they talked, acted, and I think these characters are so strong! It's very full of tension, well done!

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  21. You inspire me to work on a no-kiss scene in my WIP. I never really thought it through before. Such a teaser! Good job.

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  22. That was so hot, so sweet and so romantic. I loved it!

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  23. Wow, great excerpt and clip! :)

    ~Ella

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  24. Oh my gosh, that is one of the best of the day. I was completely drawn in. Sighhh!

    My first novel is a medieval romance, poor thing got trunked, but it was my first love :)

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  25. You blogger friends are so very kind! Thanks for the encouraqement and taking the time to read my excerpt. It's always a little scary to put it out there, you know. :)

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  26. Oh, can you just get this book published already? (I'm sure you feel the same way!) I really want to read the whole thing! The language and characters just suck me right in!

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  27. Awesome chemistry and tension! Love your historical voice and the word flow.

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  28. That was a fabulous "almost" kiss!

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  29. Nice! Mine is medieval as well. Love reading in that time period. Excellent scene!

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  30. Well done, good lady. This is the first period almost-kiss I've read, and I like it very much.

    (Sorry I missed the snogfest, though.)

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  31. All these scenes are seriously wanting to make me read the novels they come from! A very sweet and interesting scene. I like your main characters already!

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  32. Fantastic excerpt, Sherrinda. ooh, can't wait to read more.

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  33. I love his line about being thirsty; that's cute and funny at the same time. And I totally adore Smallville. Best show on TV. :)

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  34. Tracing the line of her lips with his finger? And the "having been thirsty as of late" remark? What a tingle inspiring scene!

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  35. This was great! I love how he traced her lips with his finger. Good job, Sherrinda!

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  36. Yay Sherrinda! Loved it! Can't wait to read the rest!
    (As you can tell, I didn't make a new years resolution to stop using exclamation marks! lol)

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  37. I can't say I've ever voluntarily picked up a piece of medieval literature, but I like this. I really liked this excerpt. It's true that good writing is good writing, no matter the genre!

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  38. Thanks for taking the time to read my excerpt! I appreciate all the kind comments! :)

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  39. i like that! i can't wait to read more.

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